does this help?
About the only green around
is laurel thickets on hillsides
and velvet moss matting damp ground---------------moss matting=alliteration within a verse
silencing my foot fall's sound----------------foot falls =same as above
where the hibernating newt now hides---------newt now =alliteration again

The bare trees hardly even shiver
from the swirling mountain wind
which seeks in earnest to deliver
air that makes a few ferns shiver-----------few ferns =2 rhyming words within a verse....I think assonance
as I round the creek's next bend

In my opinion any similar and repeated word sounds can be used to improve a poem of any style if not overdone....now back to the regularly scheduled program lol............stan

The difference is about the same as the difference between a speach and a song. Both can deliver the same message but the song brings more pleasure to the listener. hmmm....... let me make up an example right quick
speach: A war is approaching but we will prevail because of who we are
Poetry with either alliteratio , consonance or assonance:
The loud cloud of a storm draws nigh
replacing light with growling gray
and strobing streaks of hammerblows
our enemy shall rue this day

For we have justice on our side
while all they have is heinous hate
and conceit for their prideful bride
we shall stand stout as we await

OK not the prettiest thing but I hope this helps a little..........stan

whether you can or not understand the concepts to the extent that you know the piece that you wrote is crap you have introduce me to two poetic devices that i may want to explore and utilize in future. Thanks poetic friend for teaching me of another dimension in poetry.

always
willy

Wow, it packs a punch this one. I have Jack & some beatnik sitting on my shoulder now. Definitely nteresting & lots there to get lost in (or not). It is far from my style & I feel a little impotent in crituquing, especially since I feel so rusty myself after such a long break. It does call me to read again & I am intrigued to read other works of yours too.

I couldn't help thinking my boys would love to rap with this though (Mostly they choose very political material to rap, it more that way in Australia, the rap has a different focus than the bitches & Ho's I suspect dominate US rap)... not that tha's my scene.

Anyway, I can see the attraction to the heavy rock stuff after reading this (did you do original songs?)... this would be quite a baby to train into a heavy rock song I think.

Cheers
A

is just that it makes it sound better read aloud.

That's why we will be looking at how to match assonance/consonance to content and use it for pacing.

As all the poetic forms, they have many uses, assonance/consonance well it is sometime natural and there again some struggle.
I am of the opinion that it is a personal thing, if you want to write with a certain structure then do so.
All poetic forms, to anyone that doesn't know them, is hard but can be learned, except by stubborn old B's like me.
For all those that strive to learn these things I think they are the tops in poetry not that they can write it.
We keep going on about all the old masters or Bards about how great they are, when are we going to find some modern Bard's that can write.
What is it they are supposed to write, Shakespeare, Ballads or Epics or for that matter anything.
Is there anyone out there that can get their heads out of the old books and define what the modern poet should write in perfection instead of going ON and ON about years past.
A challenge here to define modern poetic perfection, and one that will survive without any troubles for hundreds of years.
So come on all you masters of the arts lets have a proper talk on this subject and a conclusion that will last a hundred years,
Yours Ian.T