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I REMEMBER WHEN

Submitted by turbo1904 on Tue, 2022-08-30 15:25

I remember when you were,
The peanut to my butter.
I remember when you were,
The one; There's no other.

I remember when you were,
The near to my far.
I remember when you were,
The drink in my bar.

I remember when you were,
The calm to my hectic.
I remember when you were,
The spell in my magic.

I remember when you were,
The release of my pain.
I remember when you were,
The link in my chain.

I remember when you were,
The reason for my smile.
I remember when you were,
The color of my style.

I remember when you were,
The reason to try.
I remember when you were,
The blue to my sky.

I remember when you were,
The reason to be good.
I remember when you were,
The gangster in my hood.

I remember when you were,
All I would ever need.
I remember when you left me,
Here to bleed.

Turbo1904 ♥

Style / type: 
Structured: Western
Editing stage: 
Not actively editing
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

Geezer

Wed, 2022-08-31 06:33

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this was going to be a sad one, right from the start. I wasn't disappointed! I know that you aren't actively editing, but I think that you could use a little touch-up to the last line. Maybe like [Broken] here to bleed? ~ Geezer.
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