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I missed the boat (senryu)

It's raining sadness
The wrong side of the island
Where I await light

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
5/7/5 senryu emotion in shortness.
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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PERFECT nothing more needs to be said

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Thank you.

Thank you...Teddy

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I missed the boat once and the guy I was shooting toward gave me the finger lol.Good Senryu

Thanks Stan for the review filled of imagery. lol

Thank you...Teddy

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my boats
they ALL have
HOLES
SO NO SELF GOALS

I'll send you the boat glue and some plasters.

Thank you...Teddy

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boat here. Nice one
~ Geez.
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Thank you, maybe without the title it may not have worked. I'm pleased it has though.

Thank you...Teddy

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Dear Teddy, it's perfect and the imagery is lovely. I think senryu's don't have titles, but it's a free world.
Thanks for sharing, I enjoy it very much, Gracy

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I am very happy you have enjoyed this.

Thank you...Teddy

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