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I Looked at the Sky Today

I looked at the sky today
and you came into mind,
I wondered if we were
one pretending to be two
or if we were two moving
towards each other like
sunrise to the moon.

Like love.

Editing stage: 

Comments simplicity, my dearest Kailashana; and this is quite simply, beautiful.

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Simply Beautiful, I wonder how those around you can keep a lid on your passion lol, Hope that they can see... Yours Ian.T

PS:- Just read Jess's comment and I think he is a little Biased lol..

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Dear Kailashana I would
in my opinion of a read as you finish
this work with "like" twinned
I would want to add for me
anyway in my mind's read

"as Love"

for some reason that just came
to me from inside my thinking here
on a hot summer day

Im tired and Ive got errands to run
and I just popped in here to my library
to write this and to check up on the stream

and found your work

Just my notation for today
will be on later tonight when I get the
computer and all is quiet
the walk with the dog around the hood
and home

where my life rests
at times
its peaceful works
the poets words

Thank You

I expect ya'll are like Susan and I, a binary system .....................stan

I would call it trite.

Since you did I call it a moment of vulnerability and am touched.

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