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I live in a world

I live in a world where everyone's sleeping
Perpetually dreaming that they are awake
Enchanted beneath a deep illusion
That they hold freedom for freedoms sake
Hooked on millions of tiny machines
Never seeing what's really here
A future that no man could of forseen
A future no man could ever hold dear
And then there are those who see the beauty
The sunsets, oceans and towering skies
Aware to one heartbreaking reality
Aware to this race's sad demise

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Firstly welcome to Neopoet site I hope you enjoy the company of travellers here..
Was it a good year, well to some it was a good year.
I shall not say lest I give more of my life away. lol
Just a very small point in a very good write:-

A future that no man could (of) have foreseen..
To use of instead of have well I hear it in spoken words but very rarely come across it in poetry, just me being bitty, but that is me at 11-00 pm lol, Yours Ian.T

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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