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I Live
I live in the spirtworld..
Where wrath of time
Is prose impearled
Take my pen and paint your shore
Sixteen pence
Is twice two four
Commence your golden shaded lore
And shape my words
To tend no more
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themoonman
Tue, 2013-01-22 04:02
Club Special,
While your rhythm is good, this poem for
me lacks substance, nonsensical at best.
thanks for sharing
Richard