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I Leave The Bathroom Lighter

I've done it once, i can do it again
I've done it twice without a friend
I've done it 6 times in 3 days,
pauses, rewinds, cause delays.

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Last few words: 
bullimia is a big problem, i have had an eating disorder and still sometimes struggle with it, i am alwat
Editing stage: 


of your problem. I like the poem, but if you want to bring attention to Bulimia, you should mention it, because just reading the it, you cannot discern the reason for the poem. I thought your title was good, but I was about to make a joke about it. I was going to say; "Do you have a separate lighter for each room of the house? The near rhyme and the rhyme is good. Wish I could be more helpful, but that's all I have. [Do make it longer,] and let the reader know what the intent of the poem is.
~ Geezer.

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I can teach you to survive drugs but not bulemia, it seriously fucks with your internal organs and makes your teeth fall out (the stomach acids).

It seems you didn't take on board your own message from the two DEVORCE poems.

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I give you my solemn word of total confidentiality. Beyond even what a Doc or Shrink offers, I won't dob you in even if you threaten suicide or or murder.

You've got to trust someone.

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