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I Heard Of Your Name

Long time, I heard of your name;
I came to know
If it’s true, the word…
The peak of the golden mountain,
Set in the forest
Where all birds meet and jubilate.
It's fixed near the low water
At my feet the water flowed every day ;
And watched with every single seconds,
Until my eyes dizzied for six years
Your name is not famous like Jesus
You taught me success,
And trained me to hope for fortune
Everywhere I found your teaching,
In my bosom, I say;
Though no single word in my mouth,
Nor breath in my nose
Than all I saw and got in your name,
G.G.I.C, you’ve mothered me with
The sweet milk of your breast,
The scent of your back,
And the lashes of your hand,
Now I believe it is of good
That frown on your face
Told me here or there to go,
Yes, or no to say,
When and how to say then.

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Last few words: 
GGC means God's Grace College. It's the name of secondary school I attended.
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Not Explicit Content

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it is evident that you gained a lot of life lessons from GGC. all to the betterment of self. these are the tools that you will always have at your touch. thank you for sharing it with your fellow poets!

*hugs, Cat

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