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I Had a Little Help

If I don't take them,
they will never let me leave.

These pills meant to raise
a magic wall around me
built on the strength of
1,000 milligrams.
A chemical fortress
that crumbles
with the breath of words
whispered from the eyes
that wept when the key
turned behind me.

They see me, a cliche,
bruised, battered, bleeding
and broken,
against the wall.
Not the wall that fell.
This wall with the key
they won't turn.
This wall they constructed
with every fist
that storied my youth.

No one wants to speak
of what the wall did
- is doing - to me;
only whisper about how I
need the wall,
these walls,
this massive sanctum
to protect me
from me.

If only they would
stop crying,
stop whispering
long enough,

they just might realize

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there's a very effective use of allegory throughout.
Are you aware of it.
I read this as a representation of child abuse.... Please tell me if l'm off the right track but I find it very touching anyway especially the last few lines.

If only they would
stop crying,
stop whispering
long enough,

they just might realize

Well done!

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You are most correct.

Thank you for taking the time to comment.

Scott

Scott

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Very powerful; this hits closer to home than I care to think about.
Particularly the last stanza. Everyone is reacting, everyone is pitying and treating, but no one is listening.
Most very excellent poetry.

Respectfully, Jim

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Thanks for stopping by. appreciate the compliment.

Scott

Scott

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Excellent poem, but such a sad story. Regards Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

Thanks for stopping by and offering the compliment. Unfortunately, most stories I write are sad. However, I am working on changing this.

Again, thanks. Always welcome your opinion.

Scott

Scott

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This one is rough.

W. H. Snow

A poet is a nightingale, who sits in darkness and sings to cheer its own solitude with sweet sounds. Percy Bysshe Shelley

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Thank you, Sir for stopping by. As far as content, you expected....?

How is the writing after the lay off?

Scott

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I didn't think this one was as dark as most of my work. I felt like Love Affair was far darker than this.

Scott

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What are your plans? How is your time?

W. H. Snow

A poet is a nightingale, who sits in darkness and sings to cheer its own solitude with sweet sounds. Percy Bysshe Shelley

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To write when I can. Lately that has been anywhere from 11 pm to 2 am. My time is severely limited right now because of my business. Going to be that way for a while.

How have you been?

Scott

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