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I can always rely on you to let me down

Grabbing on to something new,
Flying away,
Just me and you.
They couldn't catch us,
We were never meant to be caught,
Flying forever faster,
than the speed of a passing thought.
Opening page one in the book of our lives,
holding hands hoping that our love will forever thrive.

Perfect passion and partnership,
Paved the way to forever love and peace,
Full of strength and happiness,
Time to turn over a brand new leaf.
No more apologies,
we had left that pain behind,
Soring high into the sunset,
Content in our love of a different kind.

You and me against the world,
despite what the haters say,
I wanted to love you,
Cherish you,
We would always find a better way.
To come out of the darkness shining,
seeing the world anew,
Build a perfect life together,
For two,
Me and you.

Now I sit here in silence as I nurse my broken heart,
Constant fights and bickering,
slowly tearing us apart.
'You're right I'm wrong, can we drop this now?
'I heard you the first time!'
'no need to shout out loud'
'Yes I forgive you'
You didn't mean what you said,
You got upset and angry,
I'm sorry let's go to bed'

All is forgotten by you,
as you turn away from me in our bed tonight,
You lie there softly snoring,
As I gently turn off the light.

But I lie here staring blankly foward,
And replay our conversations in my head,
Did you mean it?
Do you love me?
Do you even remember what you said?
You have hurt me,
look at me, I'm forever broken.
Your words cut into me like knives,
however softly they are spoken.

I love you I want you,
For you I've given up so much,
All for hollow, empty kisses,
And your timid, untender touch.
You make me feel so empty,
So stupid and so weak.
But it's all over for you now isn't it?
Even though I cry myself to sleep.
Again

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Last few words: 
This was written a month ago, me and my husband had a nice life and were very much in love or so I thought. We haven't been married a year yet and we already are falling apart. And I admit I find his cool aloof attitude to me and him ridiculing me, pretty tough to take. Keep thinking it will change but I know it won't x
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Comments

very vulnerable. I like the poem's rhythm. and I hope the best for you both!

Thankyou x

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The Highs and Lows of a relationship vividly expressed in your poem with good usage of words creating two different moods, feelings & sentiments...
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raj (sublime_ocean)

I am grateful for your comment Thankyou xx

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