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I believe in Manly

I saw the miracle of stars that can sparkle light
Though the sun will burn and blind their bright,
I glimpsed the golden talent running in their veins
Taught in history the Manly dream is uncontained

stands of hearts felt as you lagged
when facing another penalty flag
Oh maroon and white you need to rise
Be the stars I know and steal the prize

It isn't easy when you chase the sun
But burn you must before you feel the run,
That feeling that grows before a game
As adrenaline pumps, it has no name

Go to the place in your mind
you held the trophy in the blind,
Speak with a tongue of eagle feather
Circle it up boys and just be brother

Don't take the piss and say 'pretty words'
Take it from one who's lived the absurd,
Feel our belief in all that you can achieve
The first step boys is just to believe

So I may not see your stars light the day
But I love our Manly what can I say ...
And a word of advice, when we are losing
Support isn't just when you feel like choosing

Yell and scream till the last moment ticks by
Because you never know when history may fly
The Manly chant should ring in the night
Be it the last sound even though it may bite

© Jayne Eggins - 21st July 2015 ...

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Have just put the Manly team 2014 in an envelope,
I will post tomorrow before the day becomes warm.
Good that you have an outlet with the team, I hear the cry's from here lol
Take care and a good write there young lady,
Yours as always Da xx

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Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

the message! Too many people change alliances when things aren't going well! I see it all the time.
" I thought you were a _______ fan?" "I was, but they just keep losing!" Maybe if they had fans like you they would win more! Great work, ~ Higgest bugs, ~ Gee

There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

Loved the Rhyme and pace all throughout!
Loyalty..true and true...

excellent!
Thank U

good one. sorry, can't say much. will be back when I can.

Love and hugs
Alid

Can't remember reading a rhyming poem like this one from you, hun. I'm sorry its not 'good'. Its great! That pain on my chest must have messed up my mind. I loved the message in the poem (when did I ever not when it comes from you?)

Yes, Teacher

I read you words of wisdom and smiled
It is a great advice for students like me
the layers of ego the years have piled
can lead the boys blindly, you see

I discard them into the bin
to abide to your teaching
this boy is not free of sin,
he is slowly learning

The bitter truth must be accepted
or ignorance will fester
time will be left, unappreciated
like a rejected lover.

I will reclaim integrity
and strive to be a real man
to embrace true loyalty
and courage without end

let not my words be a lie,
the poison of a charlatan
bowing in shame to the sky
when his folly brings burden

I hear you, my teacher
I thank you for the advice
You inspire me to be better,
you're the light in my eyes

Alid

A beautiful write for Jayne, your words will lift her.
Take time young man to regain your strength and link all the teachings of life you have in your thoughts, then the road ahead will shine for you,
Yours as always Ian..

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Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

that's what I intended. :D

Alid

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