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I am Phoenix (MAY CONTEST)
I am Phoenix, I rise from the dead
Over and over I have stood my stead
I let you thrive, Respect I drive
From youngling, to teenager
To adult hood I spring
When I get emotional I cry a few tears
showing my grace in form of rain
Disrespect me I quake
Then like a warrior I come full force
Earthquake, tsunami, tornadoes
My love grows for whom I care
And get a little cosy with my sunny friend out there
It feels like summer but it’s my warm friendship
Everything is flourishing, until
I am tired and old, many stories untold
Walked many a mile now slumber behold
The sun is fading the warmth with it
I start to shiver It’s Autumn they say
I worked and am tired
can’t keep my eyes open, I must hibernate
Stay indoors it’s icy out there
Come lay in my arms
In wait of my loving friend
Can you guess. Who am I?
If the sun is my friend
Comments
Teddy15
Wed, 2020-05-13 15:56
Dear lovedly
Wow, yes prune there are bits that you could. This is wonderful I found it full of character and a joy to read and very clever. Don't pass up the opportunity to make this a star poem.
Thank you...Teddy
lovedly
Wed, 2020-05-13 15:58
Thanks Teddy shall
kindness for your lovely comments
Teddy15
Wed, 2020-05-13 15:57
Dear lovedly
Double post sorry
Thank you...Teddy
Teddy15
Wed, 2020-05-13 16:14
dear lovedly
I am Phoenix, I rise from the dead
Over and over I have stood my stead
I let you thrive, Respect I drive
From youngling, to teenager
To adult hood I spring
When I get emotional I cry a few tears
showing my grace in form of rain
Disrespect me I quake
Then like a warrior I come full force
Earthquake, tsunami, tornadoes
My love grows for whom I care
And get a little cosy with my sunny friend out there
It feels like summer but it’s my warm friendship
Everything is flourishing, until
I am tired and old, many stories untold
Walked many a mile now slumber behold
The sun is fading the warmth with it
I start to shiver It’s Autumn they say
I worked and am tired
can’t keep my eyes open, I must hibernate
Stay indoors it’s icy out there
Come lay in my arms
In wait of my loving friend
Can you guess. Who am I?
If the sun is my friend
i just took a couple of lines away and put some lines together i hope this helps you on your way... please feel free to pass it by of course,
Thank you...Teddy
lovedly
Thu, 2020-05-14 00:42
thanks a ton Teddy
shall review
Gracy
Wed, 2020-05-13 17:27
Dear lovedly, highly
Dear lovedly, highly attractive poem about Phoenix rising from the ashes. I think Terry has given you some good ideas. I would add one or two more, so shall return to see whether you've changed anything.
A pleasure to read you.
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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury
lovedly
Tue, 2020-05-26 04:14
thanks
LOOKING FORWARD
to your visit Gracy
ma'am
Geezer
Thu, 2020-05-14 07:53
Is it...
the plants/trees? Just a little bit of mystery here. Yes, by all means, trim this a bit. Even if you don't enter it in the contest.
It makes good reading and maybe someone will guess who the mystery guest is. ~ Gee.
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lovedly
Thu, 2020-05-14 11:40
thanks for the read Gee....
shall trim it
winning is no big deal
if we all consider ourselves as
PHOENIX and
we all are
truth can't hide
nor steal
lovedly
Sat, 2020-05-23 00:48
my final version
I THE PHOENIX
Teddy15
Sun, 2020-05-24 14:07
Dear lovedly
Just wanted to drop by and say this is gorgeous
Thank you...Teddy
lovedly
Mon, 2020-05-25 00:06
gorgeous
coz of you thanks
Teddy 15
lovedly
Tue, 2020-06-02 12:21
current contest MAY 2020
NO PROTEST
INTERESTS protect
judge one
lovedly
Wed, 2020-06-03 06:02
Teddy's deer
Phoenix is not
anywhere near
to her deer
she composed both
So there is no fear
The best wins always
O TEDDY 15
u r every one's May's
DEAR
ok deer
Teddy15
Wed, 2020-06-03 06:18
Dear lovedly
It's the first time I ever won anything, I guess I was lucky as your poem was just as wonderful.
Thank you...Teddy
lovedly
Wed, 2020-06-03 09:10
Congrats
Teddy 15
for you I am Happy
I have won 3 or 4 times
first- two
one -mentioned
and
one technically missed
this one is doing best poem of mine
in the world now
on a different site
great feeling
lovedly
Thu, 2020-06-04 08:12
read by three only
I wonder if it was even read
even by the judge
lol