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I Am Me

Have I become a puppet to the people I loved,
bowing to their nays and ayes
seeking their approval each time I have served
in every role I have played?

Let this not be true! A man without identity
is a slave to other's perceptions
in all his actions, there is no sincerity
seeking for approval, fearing rejections

I'm reclaiming my rights to be heard
the muted voice has awakened
no longer will it revel in silence
it is their turn to sit back and listen

For though I love them dearly
my life is not theirs to dictate
I can only offer the best of me
when I am free to contemplate

In the end I can only be me
because I am born to be me

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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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What did you think of my title?
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Comments

I see no reason to alter the title. About the only semi obvious "flaw" I see is the close repetition of "silence "in stanza 3. Easily cured by using a synonym in one of the lines ...something like "The mute voice has awakened". Good writing.......stan

Thanks for the visit and the feedback. Much appreciated.

Alid

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u can be u only
never me

so be happy
be urself
and
let others gloss over
me and thee

continue to compose
delicious poetry

if Stan has found time to comment
there should be a coz for
celebrating such an event

he rarely reads mine
poor winner me!
I'm still fine
three and 1/2 years
I have struggled
you have just nuggled

loved

i have read your works and i know you are one of the masters. Its amateurs like me who needs his guidance and encouragement. you , sir are already good and you know that is true.

Alid

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Would that we all could truly be ourselves all of the time, without having to live for the amusement of others! Well-worded and very appropriate!

Actually I wrote this piece after I have an argument with my sis who wants me to quit writing poems. I know she means well but I just need to stand up for myself or I might regret one day..

Alid

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A good theme, you have the bones of how to do things now let me see you live and at the same time carry on doing the things you have been doing it just takes a little planning lol.
Good luck with where to put everything, but you must come first or who would do anything if you were to become ill or not be there, let them know..
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

I'm glad you like it. I've been telling them that but sometimes they refuse to listen and that irritates me a lot, Just because I'm the youngest in the family, they think they have the right to interfere with my life, forgetting that I do have my own perceptions on things. Anyway this is nothing new. I just wish they give me a chance to lead my life my way. I have this thinking of laying it all out on the table and tell them whether you are proud of me or not I know I've tried to be a good man so there, think what you will, I don't care. lol

Alid

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This is really one of your best poems, it feels like I know something about YOU...this feels autobiographical I cant see anything wrong with it, I think you maybe finding your voice the soul of a poet is rising ;)

nice work hun

love and hugs Jayne x

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

those words coming from you make me smile. I feel appreciated and honored. In truth I still have a long way to go, hun but thanks anyway.

love and hugs
Alid

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