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I AM - experimental poetry series (II)

PART TWO
I AM

an annex
a shaft
a shank
a shack
a hoard
a pen
a pencil
some pages
some written pages from past
a blast
summer
bummer
a field lit with pigeon holes
moles
a beautiful morning
morning in June
an act of defiance
a planet
a tide
a wave
the waves
the waves that are crashing
the waves that are breaking

inside your soul.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Last few words: 
This is the second part of the experimental poetic writing project of "I AM".
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

that is made here, is not really so new, but I see you are having fun with it and who knows? Maybe it will lead to things that you are not aware of at the moment. Keep writing and see where it takes you. ~ Geezer.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

Yes, it is a kind of stream of conscious writing and actually this is the second part of it!. Thank you!

author comment

I like that you have likened yourself to
something other than the normal Human failings.

The shat out nature of your chosen format
is a boon for the piece,
Loved it all, save the--

"waves that are crashing
the waves that are breaking"

Obi.

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