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But I Ain't No Dog

If I were a dog
taken ill
all run up to me
Jack, Tom, Harry and Jill

my owner pays the bill
go hurry
take Candy to the Vet
call a cab quickly

but when it's me
they'll say
you can wait
Candy we spent three
thousand dollars

you are now a fuzzy wuzzy
still living old man
wait as you may

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Not Explicit Content

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feel sorry for the poor, dumb dog who can't talk. They want to show that they are "humane". On the other hand, people are annoying things that cry and whine about how sick they are and in general, create a fuss. Keep your mouth shut, let a tear trickle down your cheek and maybe just whimper a little bit, I think you may get a better response.

The line that goes: "Jack, Jill, Harry and Bill " should be amended to: Jack, Tom, Harry and Jill" the use of Bill kind of makes the [bill] in the following line a little off. ~ Geez.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

Doin DONED
GEE
TNX

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~ Geez.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

u alone are friendly to lovedly
all others swim in he Atlantic
far from me
should I abandon
all thee
ask scribbler also please
GEE

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you have other fans here. Don't be paranoid and start thinking that you are unloved! Lovedly! ~ Geez.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

Gee you resuscitate
me where can I flee
to my friends do convey
merci

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was reincarnated as a dog, I would most definitely rescue you from the pound, even if lovedly peed on the carpet, but maybe not if you pooped on the bed or something.

Thomas

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...so like my lost dreams...the flood

I know no swimming
ur LORD will teach me
and best of all ///// I will be the only one ever to return
BUT WHY PRAY ILL /////Haven't I had my share of kicks

lol poet friendly

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I'd really like a fuzzy wuzzy
Reincarnated dog
A fuzzy wuzzy lovely talking
Dog That couldn't swim
A dog that in a former life
The whole world liked to flog
I'd take him to the big canal
And likely throw him in
I'd watch him flop his little feet
And round n round he'd grin
So happy he became a dog
And finely learned to swim

Cheers lovedly!

Thomas

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...so like my lost dreams...the flood

I'd flap and as usual swim
you all will grin
lol thanks

What a lovely dog name him

BELOVEDLY
may ask Glee
I meant Gee

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Lovedly,

I really enjoy the combination of the theme and the tone you've chosen for this poem. Very sassy. Always a pleasure!

P.s. don't forget about your less active fans

raffy

from lovedly

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