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Hy-Breasal

As finality draws near
I see the world as ecstacy
beyond transition,
each instant burgeoning delight,
unfolding outwards into endlessness
where every second's thought
becomes eternal,
each moment's choice
a new beginning
reaching to realities unknown
until the present catches up with past
and future hurries by,
time decreasing in echoed infinities
between duration's measure
and hope's treasure
of emerald lands that shout beneath
bright shores by gleaming seas
that welcome evening summer sun
and rafts of stars forever watchful
until I stand breeze-kissed
on peaceful cusp between
the grace of glorious night
and unending ancient days,
beyond all pain and doubt.

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YES! YES! YES!

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but...what did you think?

LOL

Glad it had such an impression!

Respectfully, Jim

"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo

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for your appreciation and enjoyment.

Respectfully, Jim

"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo

http://www.lulu.com/spotlight/Race_9togo

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Your thoughts mirror my own. Thank you, and thanks for you enjoyment.

Respectfully, Jim

"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo

http://www.lulu.com/spotlight/Race_9togo

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Its all been said. I love this poem.

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

It's funny, but I thought people would tell me it needed work - glad they don't think it needs any, though!
Glad you enjoyed it.

Respectfully, Jim

"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo

http://www.lulu.com/spotlight/Race_9togo

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Big grin here. And who do you thought taught me this way with words?

Heehee.

Thanks Oz Lady,
and for enjoying, too.

Respectfully, Jim

"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo

http://www.lulu.com/spotlight/Race_9togo

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Yah, Ian is one of those people who always surprise me with the depth of what they say, even when I already know that what he will say will be deep, heehee.
My blushes, for such high praise, lol.
I try.

Thank you for your kind comment.

Respectfully, Jim

"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo

http://www.lulu.com/spotlight/Race_9togo

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such elegance in surrender. My favorite lines are:
and hope's treasure
of emerald lands that shout beneath
bright shores by gleaming seas
that welcome evening summer sun
and rafts of stars forever watchful
until I stand breeze-kissed
on peaceful cusp between
the grace of glorious night
and unending ancient days,
beyond all pain and doubt.

Your way with the written word is your gift to us and our treasure!
love, cat

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

And this, from the alter-ego of Mr. Styxx, no less.
Heehee.
Your pleasure is my enjoyment...and it is so good to see you overcoming that illness.

Respectfully, Jim

"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo

http://www.lulu.com/spotlight/Race_9togo

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