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"- Hush -"

Submitted by Obadiah Grey on Wed, 2022-12-14 12:53

In the
gathering of
silence - in the
mustering of the
dark; in every comforting
shadow hollow beats a heart,

Hollow
beats a heart
in every comforting
shadow, in the mustering
of the dark, in the gathering
of silence - hollow- beats- a heart.

Obi.

Last few words:

Buggering about a bit.

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

Comments

Geezer

Wed, 2022-12-14 15:11

I really think...

this bears thinking about, it doesn't go to as planned.
There is an element of surprise here.
I'm not sure of intent and I think that it is not finished. ~ Geez.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

Lavender

Wed, 2022-12-14 18:28

"- Hush -"

Hello, Obi,
This is fantastic. Is this an Obi invented style, or have you seen it before? It is so unique and clever - very poetic choice of words. Great title, too.
Nice buggering about!
L

Rula

Thu, 2022-12-15 02:59