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Hunting The Predator

There are monsters in flesh of Man
where abominable thoughts linger
terrorize the city with their game plan
the despicable deeds called "murder"

They often strike in the dead of the night,
paint it blood-red to spread fear.
The vortex of a violent storm truly describes,
the crimes proving their sadistic nature

I am one of those who hunt them.
deciphering their codes with my skill
My autopsies will reveal their tools
and estimate the time the heart is stilled

My comrades will do the profiling
to unmask the villains' character,
their looks, preferences, professions
and plan their capture..

Still there will be criminals like Digit
who seems to elude justice
but hunters like us will not stop,
hunting down the beasts....

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Digit here,
I have many friends in the world so will keep a look out for you to leaving Singapore.
Digit passed through there on the way to Australia a year or so ago, he was warned by the friends of Kali, who you are probably aware of, not to stay so he carried on to his ultimate destination.
This was one of the few non killing holidays he took, I probably think that the three of us will take up the challenge to see if you can catch us, you must not walk alone, now your intent is clear I shall ask Kali's friends out there to search for you,
Go well young traveller don't get too tough as we all hate it when long Pig takes too long to barbee, Yours Digit

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

We shall see who'll outwit the other. I have many friends too and they are also trained hunters. I seldom leave home but when I do leave the country, I never go alone. Wolves come in packs, Mr Digit. Do not mistook us for pigs, none of us are....

Dr Chaz

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The expression of long pig is the title given to humans when they are cooked over a fire, this was used in the Micronesia area for many years, no disrespect is meant to anyone.
The last known Cannibalism was noted in 1957, my books are very old as I am so please forgive any miss interpretation these words may have caused.
Yours Ian.T

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

I heard the churning of the Ocean
There the milk frothed and changed state
A poison I have brewed for my enemies
Madhva can relate this story true to you

It with me, are now locked in legend
Or so it is told to all men to deceive
Halahala will be mine to give too many
Even Vaya tried to make it weak

His winds could not reduce Halahala
A gift of the milky Oceans fury
Shiva he turned blue with just a sip
In a gold pot, held in the arms of Vaya.

They hunted me down killing my friends
I alone stand against the dark demons
I am the remaining essence of Halahala
Touch me not or death will visit your door

My kith and kin the hungry of the packs
The loan tiger the wolf are of my loins
Watch for me under the Cobras hood
Part me, part poison, churned Oceans milk

Wait for me in scriptures of evil doings
Shiva is my pen where other scribe truths
You cannot win I hold the hand that holds the pen
You cannot rewrite all those words again

I am the hero of the underworld invisible
I shall possess your mortal frame, no escape
I shall enter your heart and show new ways.
Yet they are the dark ways of forever,

Yours Kali

Just Joking I thought it would be a challenge to write of Kali,
I was given some help by my friends in that dark spirit place.
I feel the cold winds of Vaya seeking for me but such a futile being if only he controls the wind..
I am off to visit Digit in the USA for the gathering of the evil ones.. Yours as always or is you will always be mine.. La, La

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Beautiful portrayal of a work that's never done as death is by the secs in these murderous times.

*Collaborative Poetry Workshop* American Version of Japanese Poetry ~ Renga ~ Haiku, Senyru, Tanka.

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