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Hunger of a God

When we shared love - dragons of the evening,
and our tune was the sound of the nighttime rose.
Did you hear my wings, as they hummed love for you?
Did you grasp me tight, as if we two were one?

So I hand us down, all my time for you,
perhaps if you would, you could do it too
I always knew, that for you I do care
let there be song to really fill the air.

Skipping stones, we fling across fair water
from our perch at sunset’s fired rim edge
where breezes so warm do then slowly flow

and so we finally know there’s a birthing
made for this night's show, by a hungry god-song.

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Love the picture you paint. Let me come back to it I wanna read it fresh in the morning when it’s quiet. I’ve got a maelstrom of family chatter and toddlers talking at me. I like it

Pleased ya like it,
Mark

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I like the fantasy of this piece, I can see
two dragons flying side-by-side in a sunset sky.

I would choose my tenses a litle more carefully.

and our tune [is]...
[Do] you hear my wings...
[Will] you grasp me tight...

warm [and] slowly flow

Magical! ~ Geez.
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to have taken care of all my concerns. Well done sir! ~ Geez.
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Pleased you had a concern,
Mark

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A beautiful love story, hints of romance and uncertainty. The images of one longing for the other and wishing the other would reciprocate, all with a fantasy twist. Well done.

~RoseBlack~

What a nice comment, Rose,
Mark

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