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Humble Roses
listen to the roses
they gently speak
a language
beyond words
nourished by the soil
groomed by the season
bearing colors of life
gifted with the art of saying
sorry or thank you
with a fragrance
that touches the soul
a fragrance
they give back
even when they wither
till their last breath
Style / type:
Free verse
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How does this theme appeal to you?
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Comments
Rula
Tue, 2018-07-03 09:57
Oh raj
how I love this!
If only some would learn the roses talk!
It will be absolutely an awesome world.
If you've ever thought about shortening the title
I will be happy to offer some :)
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raj
Tue, 2018-07-03 13:26
good to know Rula you liked
good to know Rula you liked this...i always like to use short titles so would welcome your suggestion...
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raj (sublime_ocean)
author commentlovedly
Tue, 2018-07-03 15:23
very nice poetry
raj
raj
Tue, 2018-07-03 15:13
Lovedly
thanks for the read is all I can say because I do not know how to respond to a comment for the sake of comment.
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raj (sublime_ocean)
author commentlovedly
Sat, 2018-07-07 23:17
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gregwa8
Wed, 2018-07-04 00:31
I liked the idea of a rose
I liked the idea of a rose giving a fragrance "in their last breath." genius! I would consider using a different word than "soil" in the middle or the end of the poem, since it is a short poem and there might be other words you could use, to avoid repetition.
greg
raj
Thu, 2018-07-05 11:40
Thanks Greg for the read and
Thanks Greg for the read and comment....you are right about repetition of word "soil" ...i will look for an alternative...
05.07.18 : I've done the edit today based on your suggestion.
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raj (sublime_ocean)
author commentRula
Thu, 2018-07-05 16:03
Sorry for
the belated reply
I thought you can just say "Rosy talks" or
"Gentle talks"
"Gentle Whispers"
"Loyalty Never Dies"
Mmmmm... that's all I think... keep yours, it's really an apt one.
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raj
Thu, 2018-07-05 16:08
No need to apologize Rula...
No need to apologize Rula....you are a busy woman...
thanks for the suggestions for the title...i will think over them ...
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raj (sublime_ocean)
author commentRula
Sat, 2018-07-07 16:24
A good edit
Raj
But you've missed the "L" in the first line when you did the change.
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raj
Sat, 2018-07-07 16:26
thanks for the catch Rula..
thanks for the catch Rula...will insert the l again...good to know you liked the edit of the title.....
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raj (sublime_ocean)
author commentEumolpus
Sun, 2018-07-08 17:35
very nice poem!
It's so hard to write any original poem about roses among the untold thousands written about them.
I think you have an original here. Good stuff!!
Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings
raj
Mon, 2018-07-09 04:54
Hi Eumolpus
thanks for the read and your words of appreciation. Coming from the likes of you mean a lot.
Regards..
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raj (sublime_ocean)
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