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The Human mannequin
I can hold my breath
I can bite my tongue
I can stay awake for hours if that is what you ask
be your number one
I can fake a smile
I can force a laugh
I can dance and play the part if that is what you want
give you all i am
But im only human
I bleed when i fall down
Am i even human?
but i crash and i break down
Words in my head
knives in my heart
you build me up
but i fall instead
i don't know if im human anymore
i can turn it on
be a good machine for you
I can kill and destroy for you if that's what you need
be your everything
I can take so much
till i have had enough
do everything you want
im torn between two worlds
Style / type:
Free verse
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Last few words:
the poem talks about the groans and opression of the poor in our society how they re thretened so badly they bgin to behave inhuman. please share your thoughts and feelings. im still new at this so i spent a lot of days constructing it
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Comments
weirdelf
Fri, 2017-07-14 13:30
A wonderful first post, arita
and welcome to Neopoet.
This is what it sounds like to me.
https://soundcloud.com/neopoet/the-human-mannequin-by-arita162
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