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Howling in 2012

HOWLING in 2012

(dedicated to Allen Ginsberg's Howl)

I saw the best minds of my generation destroyed by money, striving,

hysterically faked dragging themselves through fascist streets to

pawn their soul for the elusive buck

angelheaded hipsters losing the ancient heavenly connection

to the starry dynamo for the the machinery

of might.

Whose poverty and tatters are deep inside

Vats and cups smoking in sterile fluorescent whiteness

and jacuzzied condos beathing frost as they chop empathy

contemplating cash.

who numbed their brains with heaven, building a hell

and saw Trumps and Turners, angling, swaggering, and

on tenement roofs regurgitated.

who passed through the universities with good grades

and fool eyes hallucinating nothing but corporate strategy

among the tears of the poor

who excelled in the academies forclosings and rubbish

obscene modes etched on the windows of the skull

Who towered in cleanshaven classrooms in evening wear

turning their rooms into chaste caskets and listening to tickertape

down the hall.

Who, untrusted with their Lucite spears came burning down Manhattan

with a pelt of bloody scalps from Wall Street.

Who spit fire in dream boardrooms, dream Martini’s at 30 Rock,

took breath or purgatoried the competition night after night. With

screams, Persian rugs, with power stares, blackberries and Pads

Incomparable blind greed in dark roiling clouds, biting at the mind

sowing stains with a smooth sailing drift of spray from the drones.

It soaks, softens, building grey From black and white,

although it illuminates the slime of the machine.

Coyote solidities of walls, backdoor greenbacks forming fearful spawn,

spine drunken-ness over their caring

Storefront horrors of three piece, pin-stripe, patent leather traffic fright…

….fork and spoon unseen undulation among the roaring winter dusks

of Harlem.

Iron-fist rantings down two points, grinding light of time

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words: 
This was an effort as experiment to emulate Ginsberg's Howl with its difficult structure using my own words. It was not completely successful but about 80% which I could live with. I'll probably write this for years. Well, here it is, I hope you enjoy it. Ron
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in anguish along side of you at the religion of accumilation. It seems that the acquistion of wealth has taken precedence over compassion for one's fellow man. I am not much of one for freeform works, but I can and do appreciate them on occasion. You did in fact, meet at least 80% of Ginsburg's structual form. The topic was relevant to today's news and I applaude your images. ~ Geezer

There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

I appreciate it, I'll probably work on it until it's perfect.

Ron

Blue Demon77

Blue Demon77

"What I want is to be what I was before the knife,
before the brooch pin, before the salve, fixed me in this parenthesis:
Horses fluent in the wind. A place, a time gone out of mind."

The Eye Mote-Sylvia Plath

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As an exercise you have achieved a great deal.

But.

I am going to hunt you down and kill you.
Nobody, but nobody fucks with the poem that touches and effects me in every poetic way.
Be warned.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
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Hi Jess,
Nothing I could do is going to take away the impact of Howl, as if I'd want to. It's a tribute and a hell of a challenge, one that I've yet to perfect. I don't think I, in fact, touched it.

Ron

Blue Demon77

"What I want is to be what I was before the knife,
before the brooch pin, before the salve, fixed me in this parenthesis:
Horses fluent in the wind. A place, a time gone out of mind."

The Eye Mote-Sylvia Plath

author comment

and an excellent stylistic exercise. As well as a worthy statement in its own right.

Of course you didn't taint or diminish the original, you would know because you would already be dead [evil laugh]

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

I don't know what I was afraid of the most, being killed by you, or being haunted by Ginsberg..hehe. Thanks much. I revere Ginsberg. I've read every poem he's ever published. I do have to admit a love for Howl and Kaddish above say Plutonium Ode, but I own the collected and a gang of City Lights chaps. I have to say you have great taste in poets....hehe. Glad you enjoyed my little attempt at tribute. There are two great films about Ginsberg, one is called "HOWL" starring James Franco and the other is a documentary of his own life, with Burroughs, Ginsberg, Kerouac, even some footage of Neil Cassady. Check them out if you get a chance.

Ron

Blue Demon77

"What I want is to be what I was before the knife,
before the brooch pin, before the salve, fixed me in this parenthesis:
Horses fluent in the wind. A place, a time gone out of mind."

The Eye Mote-Sylvia Plath

author comment

It is very difficult to emulate any person that has such a following
as Allen Ginsberg
That the write was attributed to the 1950's and the sequence of things that happened then.
I think that any piece written today, belongs to this century and that the great write with all it's leanings and reason, should be honoured for it's 1950's reality.
I have tried to find a copy of his original on www but need the book to even equate if your piece is a good comparison.
I now have to follow what others, that have read his book, have to say, and they seem to think that it's near OK or you would have been hunted down, lol. Gee and Jess seem to think you have given a good rant at the 2012 edition., but I am still of the opinion that this piece is really good for this time, Yours Ian.T

But is it Poetry ???

.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Yes, very much so. Listen to those rhythms. The beat poets wished to incorporate the rhythms of jazz to their work and I think succeeded. Of course, each person is welcome to have their own opinions, but Ginsberg and his style is high art to me.

Ron

Blue Demon77

"What I want is to be what I was before the knife,
before the brooch pin, before the salve, fixed me in this parenthesis:
Horses fluent in the wind. A place, a time gone out of mind."

The Eye Mote-Sylvia Plath

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