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How Mighty You Stand

Just standing under your majestic charm
Exquisitely you rest

To see you in all your glory
Makes me question you

There is much mystery to unfold
A tree centuries old, yet still at its best

I'm curious to know
What it is that makes you so special?

Is it because you love the rain?
Even your fruit is succulent

Or is it the fact you are upside down

Hoping someone like me could turn you around?

Rescue you from your wonderful weirdness

One thing's for sure

Where ever I may roam, in this world

You, my darling

Shall never be far

From my thoughts nor heart.

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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Baobab.
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to a Baobab tree. He must be a magnificent man. Or is he just a dream; a man as you imagine he would be? Either way, a compelling poem that gives the reader plenty to think about. As you start every line with a capital, I would eliminate the commas at the ends of lines. it only serves to confuse the reader that is used to puncuation. ~ Geez.
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It could be taken as a poem about a love, but it's actually about the baobab tree, seems my muse stayed in Madagascar for 9 years and has only just come back, I now have two poems on this magnificent tree. Thank you.

Thank you...Teddy

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Good morning, Teddy. What a wonderful tree. Of course, I looked it up and learned a lot thanks to your lovely poem. I wonder why it's called the "upside down" tree? Based on myths, but why?
I thought you were writing about a loved person, you tricked me. It's a metaphorical love, at least as far as being a person.
Enjoyed very much, best, Gracy

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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury

Welcome, yes it sounds to be my lover, I adore this tree, I had the pleasure in Madagascar they are truly wonderful.
You ask why upside down? So my tour guide told me it's because they were fighting about who was the most beautiful and god for punishment turned them on their heads, but the truth is in rainy season they keep the water they are amazing and have been in the world also with the dinasours, a truly magnificent tree

I hope maybe one day you will see one for real, their fruit is also very very good for health.

Thank you...Teddy

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I have been a few times in the awe of the baobabs in Africa. Although there are clues, I see no problem to immediately direct the reader to know exactly what type of tree has become your lover. I know for sure only by the comments. Why not in the title?

To me the poem really picks up at the end, when the tree becomes a sort of lover. I would go with that theme, add some eroticism, some motif of this intense relationship you have with the tree. Of this tree,

I'm curious to know
What it is that makes you so special? (Here you should tell us! make a list, and use the best images)

Is it because you love the rain? (all trees love the rain. the Baobab loves it differently than other trees)

I think you are onto something special. The Baobab is a very surreal looking tree, older than history. The connection between you and the tree is special, and I would love to see what happens if you dig deeper into the imagination and find the images and feelings this tree evokes in you, how it shares your very thoughts and your heart. You're well on the way, keep going!

Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

I will work on this, I agree maybe use my imagery better to what makes this a Special tree, I am deeply grateful for your ideas, I'm glad this tree pulls you in because as you and I know it does have its magic,

Thank you...Teddy

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