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Hot Ginger

It's in the tingle
of a hot ginger toddy
that turns me on
when my body
needs some fire

or

it's in the tingle
of a hot ginger 'body'
that turns me on
when my totty
needs some fire

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I like the first version best as it makes more sense for me, but all in all there is something to ponder in both.
keep writing.

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good stuff Betty, funny as hell!

Respectfully, Jim

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Read this yesterday but had to run before i could comment, i was trying to think of a humorous comment. Anyway getting back to today, i loved this very good poem. Love Roscoe..

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

I read this when you first posted it. Sorry that I did not leave any comment. I will try to be better about that in the future.

There isn't much to say on this one other than it's great. I flowed nicely and I especially liked the "suggestive" tone of it. I feel like you offered just enough to draw the reader in.

Scott

Scott

Not only have you been a fantastic writer to me, but you have taught me how write to inspire other people. Thank you for being such a great role model.

V/R,
Lamar of Liberty City

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