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Horror House (Hell House)

Awakened in a strange place.
A house not like any other.
Dark rooms, and foreign passages.
Doors shaking on their hinges.

The walls moaned and exhaled.
Flatten hands felt the still beating heart.
Stretching hallways warped, and twisted.
Screaming rooms glowed with red smoke.

Trapped inside this horror house.
There was no threshold,
Nor exit to be found.
Once inside nothing ever leaves the grounds.

Snakes slithered through the plumbing,
Rats crawled across the ceiling.
Hell house feasted and consumed,
With an appetite for lingering fools.

Spinning rooms, melting staircases.
Floor board started curling back.
This nightmare house was collapsing.
The songs of waking walls never called...

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This is a powerful write. I cringed

This is actually a narrative of sorts. I have chronic nightmares. I am almost always in the huge house. And these are some of the things I remember when I wake up.

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