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Holiday Poem To A Friend... December Poem

My friend is a poet, just like me
Well, we don't write the same
But it's apparent for all to see
Even though you don't know their name

I write of things that I care about
They write of things that I wouldn't
I'm sure to write of things, no doubt
That they might not or shouldn't

It's tough to see where to stop or start
Even though we are friends, you see
Because there's things in everyone's heart
Different from you and me

Style / type: 
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

Had you added two more lines
with gg ending
this could become
a FREESTYLE SONNET

abab cdcd efef and gg=14 lines only
see SHAKESPEARE SMILING
LOL
My Friend YE BE Gee

and you are mine. ~ Geez.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

author comment

still a secret! LoL ~ Geez.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

author comment

I like the way this could be taken to have been written to almost anybody

That's how it was meant! ~ Geez.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

author comment

brings flow to every good poem.
That's nice.

"Poetic license
gives
the poets
the free will to
embroider a good tale
and deviate from the established rules of language"~Jackweb

I love rhyme and strive to do it as well as I can. I'm glad that you enjoyed it. ~ Geezer.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

author comment

Your style is your unique identity of your own composition.

"Poetic license
gives
the poets
the free will to
embroider a good tale
and deviate from the established rules of language"~Jackweb

that you are right, I guess that most poets, that if they write enough, they do develop a style that is recognizable. I am glad that you enjoy my work. Thank you. ~ Geezer.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

author comment

..strokes for different folks. As usual, your approach to rhyme and metre are enjoyable. It really makes my day to read poetry like this. Cheers

Thomas

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...so like my lost dreams...the flood

so much for your consistent encouragement and praise of my work. I gives me a sense of accomplishment to know that I have made someone's day by writing something that gives them some pleasure. You're not so bad yourself; I wish that you would write more. ~ Geez.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

author comment
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