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In His Eyes (by: eddy styx)

In His Eyes

it came like a gun shot,
in the early evening shadows
shattering the silence
of the palpable stillness.
like an ill wind it blew,
no good would come of this
lives would be forever changed.
the veil of calm destroyed
by actions of planned revenge
birthing hatred so heinous
it choked the very air.
all who stood within his shadow
felt the evil spreading,
and in his eyes,
saw the demons dance!
*this for You, PUTIN

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that you are sending eddy to Russia! It would be good to see Putin get some special treatment for the evil he has perpetrated
upon the Ukrainians! I think that Killer will soon be going to visit that new General and his troops that are now in charge of the war. Putin will get his for sure, but we need to stop the holocaust, that is being let loose upon the civilians, before we take on Putin. Go get him eddy!
~ Big hugs, Geez. BTW, I do believe that the first word in your poem should be {It] not in.

It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

but eddy doesn't know enough about Putin's geography and personal habits to write anything worthwhile, yet. but he's working on it. thanks for the critique and spell check ;) I appreciate you, I wish more poets did.

*hugs, Cat

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Good work, I believe this symbolized what many of us think. I like the way you have couched the issue, without going into specifics. I like the use of your words.

All my Ukraine pieces are couched in specific components of the unjust war. I wish I could write in more like you have, however I get stuck in specific events I have read about or seen on news reports, and am driven to include them in my pieces.

My only suggestion would be to capitalize the next line after a period. IMO this makes the poem more readable.

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are you a historian, or did you teach at some point? I've noticed that there is a lot of precision and dignity to your writes and comments.

ever, eddy
*hugs, Cat

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I research.

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