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Hickory Dickory Dock! ( Childrens counting song )

Hickory Dickory Dock
The shepherd gathers his flock.
He shears his ewe’s,
In one’s and twos.
Hickory Dickory Dock.

Hickory Dickory Dock
The herdsman looks at the clock.
He stops at three,
to have some tea.
Hickory Dickory Dock.

Hickory Dickory Dock
The farmer rests on a rock.
With four bags full
of soft warm wool,
Hickory Dickory Dock.

Hickory Dickory Dock.
The wife, she knits him a sock.
With five socks more,
strewn on the floor.
Hickory Dickory Dock.

Hickory Dickory Dock
The workhand’s tally his stock.
From naught to ten
and back again.
Hickory Dickory Dock.

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Structured: Western
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According to Wickipedia: The earliest recorded version of Hickory Dickory Dock is in Tommy Thumb's Pretty Song Book, published in London about 1744, which uses the opening line: 'Hickere, Dickere Dock'.[1] The next recorded version in Mother Goose's Melody (c. 1765), uses 'Dickery, Dickery Dock'.[1] The rhyme is thought by some commentators to have originated as a counting-out rhyme.[1] Westmoreland shepherds in the nineteenth century used the numbers 'Hevera' (8), 'Devera' (9) and 'Dick' (10).[1] (See Yan Tan Tethera)
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You is being fun
with this twisting tongue
Me being so young
I started another one

Yan Tan Tethera
Got me self some leather a
Gonna make a plethora
Of shoes to wear to work..
La La
Great write we should dickere some more docks or rewrite some nursery rhymes,
Yours Ian.T

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Glad you liked it! I like yours better! really funny. Dickering some more Dock would be fun! Ha ha
especially with your sense of humour!

Thanks again!

Love Mand xxx

P.s sorry about abscence - it's manic here over the school hols. I've got a house full of grandchildren and the computer has to be fought over! Ha aaaaaa.

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Got in a bit of a tiz
Cus I thought that I was a wiz
But I being from Wiltshire
got into a mire
Didn't know me wiz from me tiz
Which is sad it is.

I shall retire and be
a Moonraker you see
There be less trouble in thur
As life is a blurr
As I is now past 7 T
I better think not of you
But more of me He He
Love Ian.T

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

You crack me up Ian - ha ha

I hope you've published this!!!!

Mand xxxx

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enjoyable take on this nursery rhyme. I have done a few too which the kids loved, but their parents weren't overjoyed about lol.

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