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Hi five mama I've come

Hi five mama I've come

Mama’s upstairs
Many always call mama
When they have it at night
or when they are white in fright
and now you are also right
mama is awaiting her sonny upright
but not ever in sight
as many mamas will be seen
floating once you are there
God knows where
is our mama up there....?

so take care
take her last snap
she must be taking a long outstanding nap
and
may not say sonny
now come mamma’s way
sorry no skirt now to display
we all have none here anyway

you also come nude right
and
forever in freedom stay
mama loves you still
but here you will have to find your own way!

Hi sonny, stay
there
as long as you may!!!...

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hell, the whole poem had the feel of a submission to the horror workshop. Mama is terrifying. I may be reading this all wrong, but I did not like Mama and I pity poor Sonny.

W. H. Snow

A poet is a nightingale, who sits in darkness and sings to cheer its own solitude with sweet sounds. Percy Bysshe Shelley

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who misses his mama
so hides behind skirts also
hope you too did
when you were young
no chances once mamas are in heaven
we all would also be then clean shaven
as cold as
S NO W

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