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Here's To Us

Here's to love.
To friendship. Respect. Compassion.
To family. Perseverance. Strength.
To mistakes. Learning. Moving on.
To dreams.
The ones that got shredded.
The ones still gleaming before us.

Here's to change.
To darkness. Ebony. Frightening.
To light. Exploding. Exhilarating.
To adversity. Weakening. Empowering.
To giving them hell.
The ones who still stand after losing it all.
The ones still humble when they have it all.

Here's to us.
To being free. Wild. Passionate.
To hugs. Tight. Reassuring.
To days. Sunrises. Sunsets.
To nights. Starry. Crazy.
To living.
When we pick ourselves up after breaking.
When we pull each other from the ruins.

Here's to you.
To your touch. Warm. Strong.
To your eyes. Sweet. Loving.
To your voice. Musical. Soothing.
To one more drink.
When nights find us laughing crazy.
When I need a place to fall.

Here's to love.
To friendship.
To family.
To mistakes.
To dreams.
To you.
To me.

Here's to us.

Last few words: 
Planning on self-publishing a second poetry book, so I'll be posting some stuff I'd like to put in the book. Just looking for some constructive feedback. Thanks!!
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author comment

Definitely a publish worthy poem!

I think I would've done it a little
different but not sure it would be
an improvement.
I would remove about half of the
"to's" and replace some with "and"
but still not sure if that would improve
or just a matter of style.

Either way, great poem and an enjoyable
read ... thanks for sharing with us.

Richard

Thanks, Richard. I appreciate the feedback. I can definitely play with it a bit before publishing and see what can be done to improve it.

~ Lavinia ~

"You could say I lost everything. But I still had my Bedazzler. I'm going to be a star. You know why? Because I have nothing left to lose." ~ Lady Gaga ~

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