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Here's To Us

Here's to love.
To friendship. Respect. Compassion.
To family. Perseverance. Strength.
To mistakes. Learning. Moving on.
To dreams.
The ones that got shredded.
The ones still gleaming before us.

Here's to change.
To darkness. Ebony. Frightening.
To light. Exploding. Exhilarating.
To adversity. Weakening. Empowering.
To giving them hell.
The ones who still stand after losing it all.
The ones still humble when they have it all.

Here's to us.
To being free. Wild. Passionate.
To hugs. Tight. Reassuring.
To days. Sunrises. Sunsets.
To nights. Starry. Crazy.
To living.
When we pick ourselves up after breaking.
When we pull each other from the ruins.

Here's to you.
To your touch. Warm. Strong.
To your eyes. Sweet. Loving.
To your voice. Musical. Soothing.
To one more drink.
When nights find us laughing crazy.
When I need a place to fall.

Here's to love.
To friendship.
To family.
To mistakes.
To dreams.
To you.
To me.

Here's to us.

Last few words: 
Planning on self-publishing a second poetry book, so I'll be posting some stuff I'd like to put in the book. Just looking for some constructive feedback. Thanks!!
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Comments

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~ Lavinia ~

"You could say I lost everything. But I still had my Bedazzler. I'm going to be a star. You know why? Because I have nothing left to lose." ~ Lady Gaga ~

author comment

Definitely a publish worthy poem!

I think I would've done it a little
different but not sure it would be
an improvement.
I would remove about half of the
"to's" and replace some with "and"
but still not sure if that would improve
or just a matter of style.

Either way, great poem and an enjoyable
read ... thanks for sharing with us.

Richard

Thanks, Richard. I appreciate the feedback. I can definitely play with it a bit before publishing and see what can be done to improve it.

~ Lavinia ~

"You could say I lost everything. But I still had my Bedazzler. I'm going to be a star. You know why? Because I have nothing left to lose." ~ Lady Gaga ~

author comment

It is a rare occurrence that I comment on anything but the latest post by an author but I was intrigued. I remembered your name but could not place it to any poem. Long story short, I very much liked what I read so felt an acknowledgement of your craft very much in order. I'll be looking out for your name in the future. Thanks for sharing (and that is not just a platitude), take care.

Keith Logan
the happy chappy

Thanks for stopping in on an old piece, Keith. I have some reading of my own to catch up on.

~ Lavinia ~

"You could say I lost everything. But I still had my Bedazzler. I'm going to be a star. You know why? Because I have nothing left to lose." ~ Lady Gaga ~

author comment

its maturity in its feel emerging

to us!

most times I run it alone out there
on occasion with buds and the women
I fit in..walk like a team...old or fresh
contact...

take my coffee from a and dub in the
food court of mall...sometimes quiet
often extremely busy..
i go outside to smoke train exit
and will oft dump a little coffee on
the ground to those out on the world
or onto the next phase of existance

sometimes with the ones I have close
we do dinner...or coffee...or simple
meals...
soup kitchen is like this...well run
bright..cheery..well run...everyone
quiet enough..behaved enough..

excellent writing young lady!

thank U for sharing your talents!

W

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