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heaven earth.....life

heaven is not on earth. ......(not yet.)? some feel still...

believe what you may…. there is no heaven in an unknown place ….a heaven that you profess …none has ever seen ….nor been …..

the earth is the place Lord ….God so kindly made… if you can't create… nor equate it with a heaven ….why steps of altars you pace …

the Lord hath given you a chance ….to dwell just once …
make earth heaven or hell ….tis up to us ….

and
you too… who preach beyond those….
then unearthed skies ….

now I have flown into the wilderness….. sky high
and always love to return…. back to earth ….
my home is my heaven ….for some it may be
a haven….

GOD BLESS!

us!

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments

but it turned out wise.

Not good poetry though, even freeform uses judicious prosodic values.

cheers,
Jess
Neopoet Directors

interesting...I skipped through caught a title and built my poem from this
the skies so full of falling snow light..never heavy but steady forever lately
beautiful and haunting...as your poem..

thank You!

as Loved.

cheers,
Jess
Neopoet Directors

Good trade hauling shit these days!!
see them trucks everywhere..!

:)

Aussies and Canadians
can't ever hold hands ....
though both the Queen serve...
I shall of course read yours surely

loved

author comment

beg to differ loved...as an aussie, i "hold hands" with
a canadian wolf

i'm in two minds over this write.
i don't immediately see a lot of poetic value, but
then i think to myself, must every thought have poetic value?
can it sometimes not just be a thought?

that's what this reads like to me...a thought...a musing.
i have no problem with such, only when it tries to pass itself
off as a poem.
i like what you have to say, and agree with more than a couple
of points. on the first read, it seemed a little preachy, but
after a couple more reads, it didn't seem so at all

it's rather, like a peek at what loved believes

i enjoyed reading this

cheers
p

so true someone tried to impose
hence this.....
I composed this ...hardly stuffed poetry
but a sense of expression only....
oh shit!
some one splash

but some one has already said
if you splash poo
some will fall back
on you...
god bless

loved

author comment

not a block with simple plains and sharp edges
turning
but a multi gem planed and firing beautiful
light

more smooth the expanse
over the territory of Neo Land
crinolean poems I like
and the straight from the hip
thoughts I love too

facets..perspectives

face cards number cards
boundary shots

vivid stuff

must go

Thank You!

heaven is not in an unknown place
they who preach of beyond
unearthed skies
none has ever seen
nor been

the earth is the place God so kindly made
if you can't create
nor equate it with heaven
why steps of altars do you pace ?

we have a chance
to dwell just once
make earth heaven or hell
tis up to us

I have flown into the wilderness
sky high
and always love to return
back to earth

my home is my heaven
my haven

...just me as you know loved
hugs
judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

you retain in my eyes
a very high place
shall tomorrow
as my now close..

loved

author comment

I see you are going to edit so I'll withhold comment 'till then....................stan

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