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Somewhere a heart is breaking
as a young girl is left all alone.
Friends call round to comfort her
as she sits there by her phone.
She’s just waiting there for him
in the hope that it’s not goodbye
But he’s not coming home again
he’s leaving her there to cry.

He made the sun shine in her heart
making each day feel fresh and new.
But a cold wind has blown over her
and now grey clouds cover the blue.
Sometimes the young guys out there
can make me ashamed to be a man.
Breaking those young girls hearts
then running as fast as they can.

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Do I detect just a smidgin of irony about the dramatics of the girl? Or is that just my poor sad cynical old mind?

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