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HEART OF CHALK [Italian/ English]

Submitted by Geremia on Wed, 2012-06-20 18:44

CUORE DI GESSO

Avvicinati.
Vieni
ancora piu’ presso
a me.
Vedi nell’anima mia,.
Cuore di gesso.
Sa’ cos’è ammazzare,

HEART OF CHALK

Come closer
Come closer still.
Look into my soul.
Heart of chalk,
Know what it is to kill.

Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Nordic cloud

Thu, 2012-06-21 10:30

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Short and powerfully atmospheric,
the Italian wonderful in sound,
the chalk dust
gathered to snuff one out
in the depths of a brittle heart.

Anni

"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.

Ian.T

Fri, 2012-06-22 02:38

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A power house in a few words well thought out...
Just the typo to correct in the last line as you have "IS" instead of "IT"
Hope you are doing ok out there Know that we are thinking of you, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

judyanne

Fri, 2012-06-22 08:38

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very powerful
i like the repetition, (at least with the english version, i note the italian is different..)

this could be labelled tanka, i am sure
great write

love judy
xxx

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