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Healing Poem

Submitted by Kristen H. on Tue, 2022-08-16 17:34

I’m the one whose mistakes are made into example,
Whose clean hands white knuckle their way through a conversation,
whose love and life are only worthwhile if earned.

You say you love me “to the moon and back”
yet you turn your back to me
when I need you the most.

My whole life has reflected you.
I am what you made me to be.
Never myself, always your mirror.

Lies kept me safe from years of
your rage, your true face
that I helped you hide.
I was the mask you wore when you needed to show face.
Point to me, shame on me.

I’ve spent years trying to find myself because of you.
So here I am, writing this,
removing the mask you made
and showing my own face.
I am speaking my own truth
while you continue to tell lies.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Old work from a year ago, minus the last stanza which I added today. This is my healing poem.
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Contest: 
Neopoem Of The Week contest August 14 to August 20 2022
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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lovedly

Tue, 2022-08-16 21:52

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You have been given a life' time chance
to be what you want to be

I have paced similar tracks
which rendered a poet out of me

Still struggling
Remember
DEPRIVATION
is the best MASTER
You become what you have a
maestro

Kristen H.

Tue, 2022-08-16 22:54

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for your feedback! I used to write poetry in high school until I was 19 but I stopped for many, many years. A person very dear to me published a poetry book and when I read it, I fell in love with poetry again and wrote a poem that night. I haven't stopped since.

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lovedly

Thu, 2022-08-18 14:17

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now publish your own poetry book

Kristen H.

Thu, 2022-08-18 15:52

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it's good enough for a book??

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lovedly

Thu, 2022-08-18 16:02

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You will feel great
so many read you
they may......

Kristen H.

Thu, 2022-08-18 16:10

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I'm not sure what that means..

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lovedly

Thu, 2022-08-18 16:49

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few buy to read they use libraries
I have so experienced

Kristen H.

Thu, 2022-08-18 17:01

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That is true. Poetry isn't that popular nowadays

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Lavender

Tue, 2022-08-16 22:05

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Hello, Kristen H.,
As I read this, it felt less about whomever this is directed toward, and more about finally moving forward. Very strong, determined language. And then I read your "Last Few Words"...I might be tempted to re-title this, possibly "Healing Poem". Your ending expresses confidence and gratification.
Thank you!
Lavender

Kristen H.

Tue, 2022-08-16 22:51

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for your feedback! I thought about changing the title but I didn't. This is the second time I didn't take my own advice and someone commented that I should do it. I should start listening to my gut.
Thank you!!

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Lavender

Tue, 2022-08-16 23:01

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I think your gut may be right in this case!
Thank you!
L

Geezer

Wed, 2022-08-17 20:23

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we sometimes let people shape our lives and forge us into who we are. Then there are those situations that relieve us of those bonds and when we shuck those shackles, we finally realize who we are! I don't see anything that I would change Nice job! ~ Geez.
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Kristen H.

Wed, 2022-08-17 21:13

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Thanks for the feedback, Geezer!

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Jackweb

Thu, 2022-08-18 12:21

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a true life story! Reading through the lines you could feel the emotions: emotive, heart-rending and very touching piece!

Beautifully crafted piece!
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

Kristen H.

Thu, 2022-08-18 12:37

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Thank you so much!!

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