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He Crept

He crept up on me
slowly
played my strings
tenderly
lowered walls
gingerly
built trust
persistently
teased me
constantly
praised me
loudly
I love him
unconditionally

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I like the shorter lines I often use them myself, I really liked the poem I hope you showed him ;)

sincerely JC

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

Ah thanks so much well I married him lol glad u enjoyed
kind regards
Sueb

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I've been engaged for over 10 years one of these days I will marry his arse just hasnt seemed that important to me, im happy hes happy, he on the other hand is another matter he cant wait to get married

~JC

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

i only got married this y ear in July and the hardest part is living with him because we didn't beforehand u have all that work done lol x

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sueb, almost every poem of yours I have read makes you sound pathetic.

cheers,
Jess
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thanks Jess

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