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A hand simply out of reach

We were like the tide
drifting away with our
shallow streams
of dreams .
Never really knowing
which way the wind
was blowing .
But as the days
dimmed to dawn
we wake up the
next morning
and they’re gone .
Leaving us alone
with one thing to do
move on .

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Hlm life without literature is a life without logic.

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your poem is succinct and comes to the point. I admire this. my favorite lines are:

Leaving us alone
with one thing to do
move on .

always, Cat

When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

did you mean/////they are gone

good eye and good catch, lovedly!

*hugs, Cat

When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

Thank you lovedly my head is constantly in and out with pain to the point where it’s feels like it’s just drifting. Anyways thank you

The message of this is you have to keep going even through the hardships you can’t just stop.
Because the world doesn’t care if you just gave up it just goes on without you so you would have to learn to move on and keep the memories.

Hlm life without literature is a life without logic.

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'Iwas when young
many times fazed all were still
at my intelligence amazed
Thanks to HUMAN WILL
I get those brainless waves
often still

Edward Nigma I enjoyed your poem, captured the theme very well.

Candice Vitalien
"Keep glowing even if no one can see your light.
For among the hidden stars on the darkest night
Someone will look up and behold
The flickering hope; words untold;
Strength and Honour my Warriors! "

Is very classical or it echoes an older time. You have a way of showing me really intricate feelings through a large lens. That is you take a broad topic, something everyone can relate to, and then focus it right on one aspect. You do it quick and concise which amplifies this focus. It’s the second time I felt that way reading your stuff.

Great job.
Tim

It’s perfect.

A poem is like an arrow it has to have a point in order to be effective .

Hlm life without literature is a life without logic.

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