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#haiku 2

flowers fragrance called
soon bees enfolded petals
relishing nectar

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no where near as good as the first one I read. Try numbering them so we can compare them and refer to them.

I suggested you name your sonnets, because not to compares oneself to Shakespeare, which comparison none of us can sustain!
So maybe just number the haikus, which are not supposed to be named.

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Alright Jess, I will do the numbering.Thanks for the comment Jess.

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but us poets just fucking love breaking the rules,eh?
This is a series of haiku/senryu I did on a theme.

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