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H.A.
Hazel eyes, bright smile.
Candied apple.
Sweet sweet succulence.
Collapsing from temptation.
Oh, Snow White darling.
Am I your poison apple?
Filling your body with my toxicity.
I want to know
What you have seen with your kind eyes.
The tears hidden so deep behind your radiant smile.
I want to know every inch of you,
Candied apple.
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Free verse
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I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Last few words:
This is about a vibrant girl, she caught my eye the first time I saw her I was instantaneously captivated by her.
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East Coast, USA
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Robert Frost, William Shakespeare, Emily Dickinson, Edgar Allen Poe, Maya Angelou.
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Geezer
Mon, 2020-03-30 14:17
How sweet...
Does she know? A most excellent poem about an attraction that may go either way.~ Geezer.
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Liberty Rayne
Mon, 2020-03-30 15:42
I’m so nervous to tell her,
author commentLiberty Rayne
Mon, 2020-03-30 15:42
I’m so nervous to tell her,
I’m so nervous to tell her, we’re just friends right now, but I hope to tell her soon. Thankyou for you invitation! And your kind words. :)
author commentGeezer
Thu, 2020-04-02 14:17
I wish...
you well. I hope things go as planned and you achieve your heart's desire. Fingers crossed! LoL. ~ Geezer.
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lovedly
Mon, 2020-03-30 14:24
I want to know What you have seen with your kind eyes.
LOVELY
Hazel eyes
HA
Liberty Rayne
Mon, 2020-03-30 15:43
Thankyou for your words ! I
Thankyou for your words ! I really appreciate them
author commentAdrien Brook
Sun, 2020-08-16 00:24
Wowww. I'm really impressed
Wowww. I'm really impressed by the juxtaposed metaphors. 'Poison apple' and 'candied apple'. I find allusions to fairy tales a bit over-done often, but I think this originality really redeemed it for me. And on top of that, the fairy tale allusion does make sense for the theme.