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Gypsy Way

Submitted by gregwa8 on Tue, 2018-09-25 23:19

this weather
is like a mirror

my soul is crisp
like the
autumn air

changing, I swear

I am shedding
the past
like dead leaves

the sky is now
gauze

bandages
on my healing heart

after three quarters
of a year
of doleful rain

a relationship lost
internal pain

I am ready
in a gypsy way

to move on

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Shadowdancer3349

Thu, 2018-09-27 09:09

sounds like you have come to terms with your life Nice write I can feel new life and adventures

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