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That Guy

Submitted by brittle light on Thu, 2010-12-02 12:00

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I walk to the store
I hate it
not the store
the walk
I hate it
why is it so close?
not that I want a longer walk
'cause I don't
but, a block and a half drive
would make me
"eccentric"
I hate that too!

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In a comment here, I called a poem "eccentrically cool minamalism". I liked that description (though not as much as the poem referred to) and thought I'd start a new genre ( or just a re-named one) for my own amusement...so here goes!
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Editing - rough draft

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Geezer

Thu, 2010-12-02 12:19

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brevity. I bet you would be good at Haiku. I am a bit puzzled at the title, but it drew me in. Ohhhhh.... now I get it! "That Guy!" being the eccentric! Silly me, and I pride myself at being a good one with that kind of stuff !
Nice work! ~ Gee

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weirdelf

Fri, 2015-01-02 02:09

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you do have a lot of poems with only one comment.
Replying to comments gets more.

cheers,
Jess
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