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A Growing Need (Explicit content)

Like dawn in heat
I am already slave to your loins
our impending collision
the meeting of body and mind
immanent

A gentle run of tongue
shimmers parched rims,
lost fingers are confused
with buttons and holes

Slowly fabrics are rent
falling to retire in shreds
letting shadow and light
rest on the fusing of our skin

The rod of your desire
is arched to my wetness
as buds tip your lips
my mouth parts

descending to my knees
your shaft slides down my cheek
discovering my mouth...
and the guttural sound of sin

A moving campaign
of desire, mind bending waves
traveled all the rooms with a view
unbridled hands, roamed
without thought of destiny

The whole of your intent
is rapaciously introduced to heaven
overwhelmed and conquered
I am now a lost continent
awaiting your next expedition

And suspended in
a pure vacuum of ecstasy
so exquisite it rests on my soul
I am imprinted for all time

... through the window
an icy breeze dimples my skin
and I lay in amber light

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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simply wow
the truth you have finally told
somehow
all neo's will vow
coming from you
let there be no row

Let there be no row ? Lol I certainly hope not.

Thanks for the visit

Jayne

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

author comment

Very juicy. It’s been a while since I enjoyed making woopee that much. Fun to read too. Very evocative. It also sounded very natural for you you to just express it, very uninhibited

Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

This sort of poem doesn't always come naturally but there are some moments that can't be forgotten. This was one of them. I tried to write this without it becoming porn. There is a fine line thats easily crossed but at the end of the day it was what it was.

Thanks for the visit

Cheers

Jayne

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

author comment

I don't believe I have ever seen this side of you before. Erotic, without being overly explicit and plain enough to be clear. Libidinous poetry from my Sis! How about that? I like what you have done here. So many wonderful lines, that I cannot choose just a few. One in particular that just strikes me; is "Lost fingers are confused with buttons and holes." I remember times when I felt exactly that in the heat of the moment. Love and higgest bugs, Sis. ~ Gee.
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Giggle, I have written a couple like this one. But this one comes the nearest to crossing the line into porn. I did try not to go over that line

Really happy you liked it bro

Higgliest bugs and Love

Sis xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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Now I know why Australia is so hot.....cold shower time lol........stan

Hey Bro

Hope that was a nice shower hahahaha

You cracked me up

Love and hugs

J xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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Aroused, and envious of a master poet.
Stan's correct...cold shower time.
MOST excellent.

Respectfully, Jim

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