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Green eyed boy(I wish)
Your emerald green eyes draw in my heart
I hate the days we are apart
I love your smile, your twisted grin
Your heart's the prize I hope to win
I see you stare at the black haired girl
Like in your eyes she's a shiny pearl
I wish your gaze would fall on me
But if it did I'm sure I'd flee
So in my heart I'll always find
That green eyed boy I wish was mine
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Geezer
Tue, 2021-08-24 00:43
I like this...
[Not to pry], but is this real? You have written, what I call a crush-poem and a good one! There is only one thing that I would change and I'm not sure that it would make any difference. I would change the [was] in the last line; to [were]. Glad you stopped by, nice to see that you haven't lost all interest in us. Please keep writing whenever you can. Been wondering how your stories are going? Anything new? ~ Geez.
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Viviana Smith
Tue, 2021-08-24 10:20
hahaha
Yes this is real,
I have been writing stories and I just started at a new school who is able to help me become a better writer.
Thanks so much, i started reading this book about this girl writing poetry in this secret society, and i was remided of this site so i decided to write a poem.
Kisses,
Vivi
author commentGeezer
Tue, 2021-08-24 17:34
What I meant...
Is it about you? ~ Geez.
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Viviana Smith
Tue, 2021-08-24 18:09
yes
im the girl in love with the green eyed boy
Kisses,
Vivi
author commentTriskelion
Tue, 2021-08-24 14:05
Yes
Please write here more often. I really enjoyed your "crush" poem and there are people here that can help with writing, too.
Thomas
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...so like my lost dreams...the flood
Viviana Smith
Tue, 2021-08-24 15:07
Thanks!!
I love this site but i kinda haven't been here in a while. I'll keep writing tho. ;)
Kisses,
Vivi
author commentGeezer
Tue, 2021-08-24 17:37
So glad that...
you keep coming back. It really means something to us, to have our family keep in touch.
~ Geez.
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This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.
Obadiah Grey
Wed, 2021-08-25 12:50
Oh, I think you are going to
Oh, I think you are going to have a wonderful life, Miss Smith.
Go get your "green eyed boy",
use him,
slightly abuse him,
I'm pretty sure he'll be grateful. (I know I was)
Obi.
Viviana Smith
Wed, 2021-08-25 14:09
Hahaha
Thx for this, that really made me smile!!
Kisses,
Vivi
author commentViviana Smith
Wed, 2021-08-25 14:09
hahaha
Thx for this, that really made me smile!!
Kisses,
Vivi
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