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Gray Lady Down (for Shadow our little girl)

her life force fading
gray lady down,
holding her head up
in quiet dignity.
she surrenders
to the blue notes;
for her tender song
has been written
we all sang along.
a life of protection
not a lap cat, yet,
a loving lass
expressing and
sharing her joy
to Steven.
the gray lady
has fallen...

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for Shadow and Steven
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that helps to understand the joy and immeasurable pleasure that this cat brought to your husband and yourself. Very nice tribute to the member of the family that was a comfort to all. Nice job, ~ Geez.
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she was mostly Steven's baby girl. she claimed him as her own. that was fine with me. I had Lucy, my Calico girl and Vivian who was Lucy's playmate and bed-mate. it is funny how they can slide into those empty places of our hearts. Shadow was a very sweet companion. Steven is going to miss her most. and Mia, another Russian Blue, and I will comfort him. thank you dearest Geezer.

*love, Cat

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I first off want to say I went to your profile to look for your latest poem and noticed that I was no longer following you. I want you to know I didn't do that.

Our pets are as much family as the two legged members. They comfort us when no one else on the planet can feel our pain. They comfort us when we are lonely and it feels like there is no one who cares. I am so sorry to you both for the loss of Shadow.

I hope that Steven is holding up he must miss her terribly. My condolences on the loss of a family member. I still miss my boy Pandii he was the best cat I ever had. I lost him in November 2021.

I've missed you sweet one. I will answer my messages in the morning there is much to say. I have an early appointment in the morning so I have to have an early night tonight. I will sit down and write a long email when I return home.

This is a beautiful tribute <3

Love you always Lilbit xxx

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

I never noticed that you quit following me, so do not fret about it. Steven has taken out an account here. he has started writing poetry! I am ever so pleased! he writes under the name of:

Unca Fez

I have been ill. the dr. put me on oxygen as my level was drastically low. I have a hard time swallowing liquids without choking on them.
I hope you are doing well. I have missed you, my forever friend.

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I was freaked out I don't know why it unfollowed you! Unless I accidentally hit it one night when I was messaging you.

You are always in my prayers and I will light some candles and send white light your way. I'm OK I'm more worried about you.

Your Lilbit xxx

P.s. I will look up Stevens work in the morning after I get back from the Drs. I'm about to go get ready for it.

I have missed you so much x

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

don't worry. I am getting medical attention. I'll let you Know either tonight or tomorrow, what has been determined. what I really need is pussy cat lovin' a few more cats around here would really perk me up, lol.

*love, your siscat

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thank you for the candle wishes,

*love your SisCat

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