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Grampa with L O V E

Submitted by lovedly on Fri, 2015-12-25 14:11

We love you granpa

YOU are that kindly light
that leads the whole world tonight
to another Christmas delight
may be brighter than bright
as it surges from your heart's warmth
'tis a passion for all to know
Granpa
you GLOW
We all love to HUG YOU
all must know
MERRY XMAS ALL
Still no SNOW fall

Style / type:

Free verse

Review Request (Intensity):

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

Comments

Sparrow

Fri, 2015-12-25 19:16

Loved

I remember going to Cold Lake Alberta one year in the 90's
or back some place and on Jan 1st there was a picture in the paper of a girl in a bikini at the edge of the lake the temp had stayed above freezing until the 4th of Jan, then the lake froze, and we carried on with our chopper trial, so not to worry the snow is coming and the temp will take your breath away lol
Good write take care out there,
Yours as always Ian..

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Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

lovedly

Fri, 2015-12-25 20:04

will read

on return
till then

Dream not about me
you alone will shatter
to me un-beknownest
how will it matter
you are just a part
of another clatter

Oh mighty
River
take my soul along
to the sea,

and

O my friend
will you wait for me,
till I reach
the estuary of life
torment not me,
just wait for me.

author comment

Sparrow

Mon, 2015-12-28 04:15

Loved

When we reach out for that great Ocean we leave all things behind and once again become as the Ocean.
There along the journey/Sojourn of life we pick up much, all these things will be left on that final shore of golden sand as we regain our place, in that great Ocean of dream time..
Yours, Ian, as always..

.
Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

lovedly

Mon, 2015-12-28 13:15