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A grain of sand
A grain of sand
Every soul is like a grain of sand
Amidst this troublesome land
Of which we all stand
Who will remember a grain of sand?
Whence our memories are too little to grasp
The wave will someday create a new path
Where a new soul will dance on the ignorant past
Who will remember a grain of sand?
For every moment is forgotten and nothing will last
Your tears may dwindle beneath your mask
Who will care when time has passed?
Who will remember a grain of sand?
This life we live is worth nothing more than a glance
This life is a journey that can never be put up and framed
So I'll be the one who hangs
So I'll tighten the cord with my hurting harrowed hands
This day will be my last; the leap will be my final stance
Who will care, For after all who will remember a grain of sand?
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Triskelion
Sun, 2022-01-23 20:38
Welcome to Neopoet
..the word "whence" is a great poetic word, but is enigmatic in it's use sometimes. Insignificance is a preponderance of the human imagination and has been for centuries. Many great writers have conveyed it's emotional effect with clarity, beauty and inspirational qualities. The most beautiful version I personally experienced is the song "Dust in the Wind" by Kansas.
Your piece has a song like quality, also.
Fortunately, there are enough people that figure the world revolves around them to balance the equation.
Thomas
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...so like my lost dreams...the flood
Chae goff
Mon, 2022-01-24 15:50
Thank you
Thank you
author commentRay Whitaker
Mon, 2022-01-24 10:38
Welcome to the website!
Your poem is interesting!
I am left wondering if this is some sort of final farewell, or is it something written from the debths of despair? Also why did you choose to place a line space in-between each line?
The use of white space on the page is a tool for effective accent. I use it judiciously (or I at least I think I do). It’s kinda a concept that your inner poet needs to grapple with.
Also, a suggestion for form…. Group your lines together to express some continuation of a thought.
Please remember that we suggust ideas here, however you are the final judge on your work.
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Chae goff
Mon, 2022-01-24 15:56
Thank you
Thank you! It is obviously up to the audience how they interpret the piece but I thought of it as an individual who sees the reality of our society representing a cycle of nothingness, it is a fun subject to write about. The ability of not caring. Also, thank you for the advise you have given, it is very useful.
author commentscribbler
Mon, 2022-01-24 15:26
Welcome
Should you have any problems here just holler for me and if I don't have the answer I'll point you to somebody who does.
Now the poem. Comparing us to grains of sand is a good idea