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Gothoms Bat

Batman’s secret identity is Bruce Wayne.
derived from two historical figures
Robert the Bruce
And Mad Anthony Wayne.
He’s really buff, brave,
and strong.
he is the bat wielding Bat

Batman has no powers,
For it’s not tangible
But he can rely on his tech
So he is formidable
to get him through
another day!
his parents died
earlier some way
a horrific slaughter

he has a batcave
there lies his batmobile that transforms
Into other vehicles of wonder
the Bat is malcontented as death
he hears the sirens
in a distant corner
of his abode
he has a butler friend named Alfred
who cleans the dust of the past
reverse manifesting them

Batman serves justice in Gotham city
his nemesis is the vile villain Joker
he used to kill
it was before his Character Development™
but he doesn’t kill people now
but he used to…
Now he’s truly
Gotham’s Bat

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It is a deceptively difficult poem.
I'm still not sure how to respond

Reading it aloud made all the difference to me, I think I now understand a bit more. So I did a reading.
https://soundcloud.com/neopoet/gothoms-bat-by-taty-beam

tell me if I fucked it up. If you like it upload a pic and I will post it to our Neopoet Facebook page.
I think it's very cool.

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Jess
Neopoet Managing Directors, with Richard (themoonman)

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