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GOODBYE?...or

Thank you for the nothing you have always given me
I think now I would prefer to be alone

There has never not been a ¨but¨

Please push me away so I do not have to be brave Your words are meaningless yet they make for every thought that goes through my head

What direction should I go of course you dont know

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How does this theme appeal to you?
Last few words: 
Well there is this person.
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Not Explicit Content

Comments

your last line is very long
and where were you going with this as it is more of a statement then a poem

Chrys

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Teddy’s edit of your piece is worth considering.

I am looking forward to reading more from you. Keep writing!

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Welcome to Neo. I hope that you will take these comments to heart and continue to write good stuff. The last line is a bit long and Teddy has made it a bit more readable. Trying to get a relationship right is hard, but I have confidence that you will make it! You ask all the right questions! ~ Geezer.
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