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Good Loving and Sex

good loving seals a broken heart
ease a crush spirit, when
love is gone and sex is stale

trying to hold on to what you had
is in vain, the fire is out
red sparks no longer shimmer

ashes grayish, some darkish
cover the chimney heart
love and passion once burned

dark lonely existence
behind sad eyes remembering
face glowing from love, lost

divorce a dirty word
travels through the air sometimes
slashes through hopes that this'll change

sex for the sake of doing it
stale when heart, soul, and mind
is somewhere else

searching in and out for
any signs of intimacy
good loving and sex

lies felt, emotion ripped apart
desiring anywhere, but here
hurting inside dulled the sense

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A very good subject but I think you might want to read this aloud and do a bit of tinkering. Won't take much I don't think.................stan

I read aloud and its as stale as can get lol. I was just throwing words on the iPad to see how it turned out.

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