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Going To Loo? No I C U

Going To Loo? No I C U

why do you wish?
To live longer than your time
when ICU's become your home
and
all your savings go down the drain
and
you don't even know
still loved ones hope
that pension will trickle in ,
that's why doctors so many tests begin
and
as their pockets get football fat
they grin
and
then ask why this din?
the time to wind up
does now begin
goodbye to ICU
shall never be ever in.

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and overdoses I awake many times in ICU
and once from pneumonia bad
heard stories about elders being kept alive
time and time again
how cancer took away the face of one
by half He wished they had not operated
and left him whole and dead rather then
the living monster.. I saw families fighting
when the dying one was trying to get peace
but is there a peaceful exit??

No sky to look at
no wind to touch ones hair
wires and tubes
more machine then man

a good poem about the inevitable
and about your desire to keep
away from this kind of ending

Thank You!

I thank my lucky stars

and
bless you for your good wishes .
When the time comes
let nature take its recourse
and
let's go back to the creator ,
without remorse .
Then let the docs gape
and faces may they make
what a fool,
didn't let them their dollars make .

but why delay
and
bear the pain
one day that final day
will come again

loved

author comment

This is almost whimsical. I'm betting you'll get a number of comments on the use of "and". Before they come, let me tell you that I think they work. wesley

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I shall answer well
as i know when to use and
and
you know it too
thanks friend...
four reads at a stretch great for me

loved

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