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Going for Broke:

Broke something for my play
It was never perfect anyway
So I reasoned what to say
That no way would I pay

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Structured: Eastern
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
The Pottery Barn rule is an American expression alluding to a policy of "you break it, you bought it" or “you break it, you buy it” or "you break it, you remake it", by which a retail store holds a customer responsible for damage done to merchandise on display. Does this only apply to customers (persons) and not to countries?
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who's gonna pay for that?

I'm going to hold my breath and turn blue till I get my pressie.

cheers,
Jess
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Thanks for your review but I am perplexed, which of my rules did I break?

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for line count and syllables for rhyku were the same as for haiku. You often write that way.
My bad.

[turning bluer]

cheers,
Jess
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As you may have noticed, this is a four line poem that is neither Haiku nor Rhyku - more like a free verse rhyme. Cheers.

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